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A New Breed: Book 2: Chapter 03 by TCPolecat7 A New Breed: Book 2: Chapter 03 by TCPolecat7

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This is one of the darker chapters of this Book, and introduces us to two of the villains within this story. There are others, but these get their own chapter. Also, for everyone who wondered what sort of trap Filigree was flying into... well, you just found out. :evillaugh:

I forgot to put it into the last batch, but critiques and comments and the like are always welcomed and encouraged!

- Polecat

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Nova225 Featured By Owner May 23, 2012
>“It’s not our job to know why, Lieutenant.”
-‘’It’s not our job to know why, just to die.’’ ...not sure why, but the sentence, coming from ‘random Soldier X’, made me think of this ?

>you’re part of the greatest weapon in the world, the ‘Elements of Harmony’. I will not allow my enemies to possess a weapon of that caliber.”
-Apparently he didn’t got the memo that the Elements of Harmony were a *defensive* weapon, if we can call it a ‘weapon’.

>The Ponies have always been our enemies; some are just too foolish to see it.”
-Ah, I see. The classic ‘ ‘’ass/bad’’ prince that manage to access the throne in a bloodshed, and has overly-militaristic ambitions ’ ?

>“Torturer…” the golden furred king said, “begin with the little one.
-Mmh, ok... Let’s me see the ‘grimdark’ tag... wait ? There is none ? How straaaange... -_-

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>His side twinged at the memory of the burning wave of rainbow energy that had almost ended his existence for a second time.
> “I suppose I will need a new name,” >“Nightmare Moon somehow doesn’t seem appropriate.”
-Heeeeee... wait, what now ? I’m in *total* confusion, right now ?
Is the ‘Entity’ that was ‘Nightmare Moon’, and then just ‘Nightmare’ was a ‘’male’’ ? Is it the same ‘Entity’ ? Is it Tirak ? ‘’almost’’ and ‘’a second time’’ ?

This section certainly couldn’t have been introduced in a more confusing manner ?

>“I don’t seem to recall you objecting before,” the stallion taunted the reflection
-Ahhh... huh... hummm... Something-something what apparently(?) was left of ‘evil Entity’ and ‘forgot-his-name-Super Pony’ ? Something evil possession... being tricked ? ...previous story, maybe ?

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>“Oh yes. You thought that would give you some power over me.
>To hunt up this relic… and Equestria yielded its treasure to you
>Now it’s in ME, and unlike a foal like you, I know how to use it. I know how to corrupt it.”
-Soooo... it wasn’t Tirak/resurrected Tirak/ancestor that took the Orb of Sacrifice ? It was just Ultra-Dumb Pony ?

But, wait ? The ‘Entity’ just said ‘Ultra-dumb’ took the Orb hopping it would help him control the ‘Entity’ ? ...that mean he already knew the ‘Entity’ hadn’t been destroyed AND knew where ‘It’ was located ?
How ? (I mean, not even the Princesses knew.)

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It was... huh... interesting. But, also surprisingly confusing near the end ?
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Nova225 Featured By Owner May 24, 2012
About military through the ages :
-Might have been slightly influenced, also, by the ''red shirts'' of Star Trek. Maybe. But, probably for the most part, related to the ways of ancient armies and the average militaristic cliché ?

>Interesting. I TOLD you I'd manage to piss you off somehow, looks like I did.
-Confused = ''Pissed off'', for you ? Weird... Also, I wouldn't get joy or be content from that sort of things, if I were you. not a good path to follow ; But, then again, you do whatever you want...
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner May 24, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm ex-military, there is always a bit that says "just following orders". Generally you won't be given ALL the reasons, you have to trust your superiors to know it.

Nope, he didn't get that memo, and it comes into play in later chapters.

No grimdark. If he'd actually done it, then I would have labelled it such. This is, admittedly, one of the darker chapters.

Interesting. I TOLD you I'd manage to piss you off somehow, looks like I did. Okay, simple sorting. "The Nightmare" as an alicorn before was known as Nightmare Moon, and just 'the Nightmare" as an Imp. In absorbing Ultrapony (remember the epilogue of Book 1?) it turned the entity male, which was a new experience for him. Thus he looked for a new name...

Yah, figured most readers would figure up Ultrapony had found it. No I don't go into HOW he found it... not for a long time. As for how he found Nightmare... he was waiting for Nightmare at the end of last Book, so he obviously figured something out, or at least guessed it successfully.

- Polecat
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Nova225 Featured By Owner May 24, 2012
(delete the duplicate, above. I swear... I think DA's comment system hates me or something ?)

About military through the ages :
-Might have been slightly influenced, also, by the ''red shirts'' of Star Trek. Maybe. But, probably for the most part, related to the ways of ancient armies and the average militaristic cliché ?

>Interesting. I TOLD you I'd manage to piss you off somehow, looks like I did.
-Confused = ''Pissed off'', for you ? Weird... Also, I wouldn't get joy or be content from that sort of things, if I were you. not a good path to follow ; But, then again, you do whatever you want...
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner May 24, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Not really. In this case the two guard were told all the information Celestia felt necessary. Often the "why" isn't part of information deemed important in a military structure, often because the clearance required to know "why" is higher than you're cleared for. People don't think so, but being ex-Military myself, a LOT of trust is required in your supervisors. You have to be willing to trust in their reasons, and in their commander's reasons, because generally there isn't time or need for "why" until long after it's all done.

No, I don't take joy in it. I was trying to be funny, apparently it didn't come out as I intended. (Curse you interwebs! Curse you!! :shakefist: )

- Polecat
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Nova225 Featured By Owner May 25, 2012
Yeah... The Internet is hardly the best ''tool'' for subtlety and for properly understanding the 'intended' feeling(s) from the words.
Because, well, you never can fully know what the other wanted or tried to say.

I believe that is all.
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BnGJessie Featured By Owner May 22, 2012
Lot's of drama! This is a dark chapter indeed.
Pretty exciting so far. Looking forward to the next chapter. ^_^
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner May 22, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yeah, this is one of the darker chapters I've written for this book, but it establishes one of the new villains as well.

- Polecat
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BnGJessie Featured By Owner May 22, 2012
I can't wait until that gryphon gets his comeuppances. That smug attitude of his really gets on my nerves.
Still, they both seem pretty formidable for our heroes.
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner May 23, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh, King Goldtalon gets more time to chew up the scenery between now and then. ;)

- Polecat
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