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            "How do I get myself into these messes?"


            The mare asked herself this for the umpteenth time as she slunk along the wall. Her grey coat was lost amidst the grey-white rocks, but her dyed pink and lavender mane stood out like a spotlight. What seemed to be worse was the sheer lack of any deep shadows, as if the entire network of caves and hallways glowed with a silvery light. This lead Flourish to wonder, perhaps for the first time, if the moon was just a weaker sun. Were conditions different, would this have been the sun?


            The idea of burning to a crisp caused the mare to shiver slightly before shaking her head. She had to force herself to focus, and such random thoughts weren't helping her in the least. Not that the Destroyer Imp sitting placidly in the large dome-shaped room beyond was helping either. She could see little way around it, as it had settled itself in the dead center of the room, content to just sit there. Additionally, she could occasionally see an Imp moving into her line of sight from the left hand side of the room.


            The chamber seemed to be somewhat important to her, but she wasn't sure how yet, only that it warranted at least three guards. So for now, she continued to watch, tucked into a small corner of the hallway where she hoped she had just enough shadow to avoid notice. Fortunately, no Imps seemed inclined to patrol the passages, satisfied their lunar warrens were safe from any intrusion, and the only ponies to dare intrude had already been captured. However, that didn't mean she was passive, instead listening to the chatter from the Imps in hopes of determining how many there were.


            Flourish had never really bothered to listen to Imps before, but found it mildly interesting. They spoke with strange, almost guttural, sounds interspersed with words from the pony language. Occasionally she could catch phrases of words, but they seemed strung together in nonsensical ways. It was like listening to a foreign language re-order words and force them to mean what they thought they meant. Still, "Luna galloping in socks" wasn't getting her any closer to helping her friends.


            She was about to pull back and try another passage when the Destroyer Imp's head came up, its eyes slitting as it slowly looked about the room. Flourish pressed herself tighter against the wall and held her breath, hoping that by staying completely still the monstrosity would overlook her. For a moment, it seemed to look right at her, baleful glowing eyes staring as if it could see exactly where she was, then looked onwards. It's booming, rumbling voice reverberated through the hallway she was in.


            "Keys?"


            The Imp's guttural voices seemed to answer and affirm the question.


            It gave a slow, thoughtful nod, and turned away. With a powerful yawn it let its head dip to its chest. Flourish frowned, wondering if perhaps she had been spotted, but the Destroyer only began to snore. Flourish let out the breath she'd been holding, and then slowly, carefully, stalked forward along the edge of the wall.


            She reached the corner and dared to risk sticking her head around the corner. Her eyes quickly drank in the room. Across from her, the passage continued, but to her left a small passage led to a partly hidden chamber. There was a sort of table made of rock sitting just before the entry to this side room, where a pair of Imps sat playing a game that involved different colored stones. Their focus wasn't entirely on the game, seeming more like an excuse for them to chat amiably amongst themselves.


            Amusingly, Flourish began to see personalities for the two "guards". The one on the right, slightly taller and skinnier then its partner, seemed the more excitable of the pair. It gestured wildly as it spoke, dominating the conversation as it chattered on and on between moves of the game. The other seemed slightly less vocal, its voice just a touch deeper, and more prone to use pony words it seemed. This one seemed to listen mostly, tending to be more focused on the game (which she suspected it was winning). While she was watching, this shorter Imp made a motion and sound to its partner, who got up and did a patrol around the room. Flourish pressed herself more tightly into place, but the roving guard seemed so unaware that it blithely strolled past her, and all but leapt back onto the rocky stool it had been using. Flourish found herself wondering if they made everything out of the rocks about them.


            Flourish continued watching for long, tense minutes, until another of those rounds. The timing seemed random to her, based completely on the whims of the shorter Imp. Still, when the Imp was up and moving, she got a clear look into the room they were obviously protecting. Given that the Destroyer referenced the Keys… Silently Flourish hoped it wasn't some random pony word it learned, and teleported herself into the room the Imps were guarding.


            She regained her bearings and dove to the side of the doorway, wanting to be well out of sight when the guard made his way around again. Unfortunately, the pink smoke of her teleport dissipated more slowly than she was happy with in the windless atmosphere of these moon warrens. She could only hope the roving guard would prove as unaware as he had been previously, but she didn't want to count on his partner remaining so should the smoke drift too far. She waited breathlessly as she saw the smoke dissipate completely, but when no alarm was raised, Flourish allowed herself to relax.


            She turned to look over the room and frowned; yet another dome shaped room in a series of dome shaped rooms. However, this room struck her as a sort of guard outpost. There were a handful of "useful" things, most of which required the sort of claw-hands the Imps possessed, and that only Filigree could mimic, amongst some blunt sort of clubs and weapons. Upon the wall she spotted a heavy looking ring of keys. Flourish smiled at them… they were hung from a hook mounted on the wall so that even the longest of the keys hung at least a foot over her head


            It would be child's play to teleport up to the keys, and teleport away to her friends with the keys in tow. Her only concern was weight, and she doubted they would be so heavy that she couldn't lift them for a few minutes. She was just considering this when she heard the clicking of clawed feet behind her.


            Flourish whirled about, and found herself nearly face to face with the shorter of the two Imps. She hadn't been as unobserved as she thought!! Flourish wondered if they had some sort of magic sensor or crystal or something that she had missed, but all questions were erased when the Imp roared at her.


            The mare did a quick teleport away from the Imp, and the keys she realized sourly. The Imp's attempt to claw through her left it rending only a puffy pink smoke. Unfortunately the Imp's partner came tearing around the corner, and beyond she could see the Destroyer Imp stirring itself from its sleep.


            "Sorry boys, I was just leaving," Flourish called to them, and dashed for the keys.


            As she expected, the Imps quickly realized her goal and took wing to dive for the keys themselves. Flourish smiled, and teleported herself over the lead imp, dropping her hooves onto its back. She stomped downward on the back of its head, driving it into the rocky floor, and launched herself at the keys.


            On a whim she turned in mid-air and blew a kiss to the imp, spinning around in time to catch the keys in her mouth and plant all four hooves on the wall for support.


            The Imp HAD her, and it shrieked in triumph, but the mare suddenly vanished again in wisps of pink smoke! For a moment it was confused, trying to sort out exactly how it could have missed…?


            Then it slammed head-first into the wall.










            "There has to be one!"


            "I'm looking, but I'm almost out of keys," Filigree grumbled at Clockwork, checking each key with the manacles securing Tome. The gryphon had been the first freed by Flourish, since the keys were easiest to manipulate with her claws. Since then, Filigree easily found the keys that would open for each cage and free the remaining three ponies. Galaxi was the happiest about being out, and the moment her flank exited the cage her psychic powers returned in force… which she happily used to send the 5 cages flying into the far walls of the room, embedding them in the stone walls.


            "They're coming," Flourish noted from her chosen station, standing guard by one of the two main entrances.


            "Clear here," Spectrum answered, watching the other entrance as the remaining fillies worked to free the chained Alicorn.


            "Just leave me," Trixie said softly.


            "No," Clockwork answered firmly.


            "Leave me!" Trixie cried, tears welling in her eyes, "Only Nightmare carries these keys… I was hoping but… Just let me die. The least I can do is sacrifice my life to make sure the rest of you escape."


            "I hate to say it…" Filigree noted, tossing the ring of keys onto the throne.


            "Then don't!" Clockwork answered angrily, stomping a hoof "I will NOT leave Tome behind! Not after all of this!"


            "I don't think we have a choice," Filigree answered, "We can't fight the entirety of the Imp forces ourselves."


            "I won't leave her here," Clockwork hissed, her eyes starting to mist up, "I won't leave her here to be tortured anymore!"


            "I've got an idea," Galaxi said.


            "We don't have a choice. The Imps will force our claws… hooves," the gryphon noted.


            "Um, girls?" Galaxi tried again.


            "Then you go!" Clockwork shouted, "I'll stay here. At least she won't die alone."


            "Um… hello?!?" Galaxi asked with a frown.


            "You know I can't let you do that," Filigree frowned.


            "Are you planning to STOP me?" Clockwork growled.


            "WAIT!!!" Galaxi cried out.


            "Huh?" came the collective response from Filigree and Clockwork.


            "I have an idea," Galaxi said with a smile, and motioned to the throne, "Filigree, use your wings to cut free the secure point for the leash. The metal we can't cut, you tried that already, but you can cut the rock."


            "What about the leg shackles?" the gryphon asked.


            "We only need to break one ring."


            "The one in the middle, connecting all four legs…" Clockwork's eyes lit up, "Galaxi, you're a genius!"


            "Best get on it mares!" Flourish called, and Spectrum moved to support her as the first Imps crashed into them. The pink horn-rapier slashed through the shrieking imps even as Spectrum forced them back physically.


            The Gryphon wasted no time scooting around to the back of the odd throne to find where the ring was planted. It was connected into the rock of the dais with several heavy pitons… which Filigree quickly was able to cut away the support for and yank out the mounting bracket for the "leash".


            Clockwork backed off, feeling rather useless without her armour, as Galaxi set to work. At Galaxi's direction, Trixie spread her legs to pull the center ring of the hobbles tight, and the blind mare formed a small telekinetic tube inside the circle of the ring. She expanded it to touch the sides of the ring from the inside and then braced it on the floor with a wider portion above to prevent the ring from slipping off her construct. The rest was an invisible battle of growing force behind the mental construct versus the strength of the alien metal.


            For several tense moments, it appeared as if nothing was happening. Instead, the only action was Filigree tossing the "leash" over Trixie's back and taking wing to help her teammates secure the doorway. The ring started to creak finally, and sweat began to bead on Galaxi's brow. With a sudden SNAP, the ring flew apart in multiple pieces, narrowly missing the ponies on the dais. Galaxi collapsed, only to be caught and supported by Clockwork.


            "She's free! Let's bolt!!" Clockwork cried as Galaxi steadied herself.


            Flourish motioned, "Other door!!" and the trio by the entrance began to run, the teleporting mare slashing a final imp before teleporting away. Trixie, pushed by Galaxi and Clockwork, started a stumbling run for the doorway as well. Were it not for her longer legs, she wouldn't have been able to keep up, but Clockwork kept pushing from behind, not letting the alicorn mare to slow.


            Screams chased them down the hallway, and Imps began to swarm after them, reminding Clockwork as nothing more than a swarm of ants or bees. The Imps clawed their way along all sides of the rounded passages, flyers launching and diving along the open hallways. Occasionally the baleful light of one Imp's eyes would flare, trying to shoot at the retreating ponies, only to have its aim spoiled by the horde of its compatriots.


            "I really wish I had my armour about now!" Clockwork shouted, skidding around a corner just ahead of an attempt to claw at her flank. She lowered her head and butted Trixie's backside again, pushing her faster. She had to mentally squash a worry that flared through her, as she suddenly wondered why there was air to breathe in these passages. It's not like the imps need air, so what would happen if they started draining the air out of the catacombs to trap them…


            "I'll slow them down!" Galaxi shouted, and turned to create a forcefield stretching over the entire hallway. The Imps slammed into the wall, piling up and smothering each other in their eagerness to get at the mares.


            "Don't stop running," Filigree called, "They can get around another way."


            Galaxi turned and began to run again, the field dropping and landing a number of imps on their own even as the rest pushed over them, heedless of their own.


            "Does anypony know where we're going?" Trixie managed to ask between pants for breath, "Not that I don't appreciate the rescue but…"


            "We're almost there!" Flourish shouted, and teleported forward.


            "Oh hay," Spectrum whispered as she rounded the corner. Trixie's eyes went wide when she noticed it. Clockwork let out a yelp when she saw it, and Galaxi gasped.


            Framing the hallway before them, a Destroyer Imp stood, waiting for them. Its claws were outstretched, standing before the room where the glowing portal rested behind it. Its beak curled into a cruel smile, even as the group could hear the shrieks and cries approaching behind them.


            "Keep going!!" Filigree cried, and dove forward, between its legs. Spurred by the motion, Spectrum charged herself, weaving to avoid the claws of the massive Imp. Flourish started teleporting at high speed, slashing her horn from place to place, drawing ichor from the Imp as she cut into its flesh. Clockwork got behind Tome and PUSHED, running fast and hard for the open path between the monstrosity's legs, with Galaxi creating a shield over them as they ran.


            Filigree turned sharply and splayed her metal wings. She arched one out, catching the Imp at the back of one ankle, then dived across and cut with her other wing. Spectrum dashed around the Imp and hit it as hard as she could in the back, sending it tumbling forward and onto the swarm of Imps coming from behind.


            "Through the portal!" Spectrum ordered, and motioned Steelwing, Flourish, and Galaxi through first.


            A scream drew Spectrum's attention, and her eyes laid upon a handful of Imps who had managed to avoid the falling Destroyer and got a hold of Trixie, specifically of the Elements still impaled on her horn. Clockwork had her teeth on Trixie's tail, and was pulling with all her might. Unfortunately they were losing ground, and more Imps were coming.


            "We need to move!" Spectrum called, and dashed forward, crashing a hoof into an approaching Imp.


            "You want it that badly?!?" Trixie cried hysterically at the imps, and she brought her forehooves up before her face, "You can HAVE it!!"


            Trixie brought her hooves down on her horn. A sickening "crack" filled the room, followed by a pained cry from the alicorn, her eyes filled with stinging tears. Then she did it again… and a third time. With a sudden yank, the horn came free from its owner, and Trixie flew from their grasp. Her form shone with brilliant white light as the power of the Elements left her. The de-horned unicorn landed in a barely conscious heap right before the portal, now reverted back to her original form.


            The elements, suddenly freed of their anchor, flew from the Imp's hands. With Trixie's horn still impaled within them, the Elements struck the far wall with a muted crunch. The gems shattered as they fell into a multi-colored pile of useless crystal along the wall of the domed room.


            Clockwork yelped, bowled over from the sudden release. She rolled with the motion and quickly scrambled over to Trixie, standing protectively over her as the Imps dove at them. She gritted her teeth and prepared to buck at the closest Imp, but Spectrum intercepted it, and sent it flying into a nearby wall.


            "Get her through the portal!" Spectrum cried, and whirled about to defend the retreating mares.


            Flourish and Filigree made it to the other side of the portal, and unfortunately the scene that met their eyes was no less horrific. The Throne room of the Sister Princesses looked like a warzone. The domed ceiling had been breached in multiple places, and the late day sun shone through with an eerie red light. Luna lay unmoving on the dais by the upturned thrones, breathing but unconscious, near the heavily injured and prone form of Pyre. Celestia was facing off against the Nightmare herself, the latter laughing off the former's efforts; the Goddess of the Sun continually rebuffed by the cold fury of the Nightmare.


            Somewhere in the middle of these two scenes, Galaxi realized they had a new problem. Without Trixie to power the Elements, the portal was collapsing!! Her powers reached out and gripped at it, struggling to grasp the edges and force it open again. The strain was incredible, far beyond what she had ever done before...


            "I. Will. NOT. Fail. My. Friends." the mare growled through clenched teeth, her eyes glowing brightly as the star on her forehead flashed. Her eyes began to water, her head pounded, but her telekinesis finally found the edges and wrenched the portal open again.


            The flash was answered by the shattered Elements of Harmony.

MLP (c) Hasbro

Still can't believe Devart made me split this chapter into 2 halves. Grrrr...

- Polecat
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Ohthatnoob Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012
Winced when Trix broke her horn. Would she still be a Pegasus?
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You'll see next chapter. ;)

- Polecat
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Nova225 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2011
>With a sudden yank, the horn came free from its owner
-Errrrr... ? Huhhh... ok ?
>The de-horned unicorn landed in a barely conscious heap right before the portal, now reverted back to her original form.
-I... suppose ? I ''guess'' an extra alicorn would have been TOO useful ?
Huhhh... anyway, 'horns' are essential bones; so, one day it will regrow (maybe a bit faster with some healing magic or things like that)... Probably in a couple of years.

>The flash was answered by the shattered Elements of Harmony.
-Major artefacts wouldn't have been destroyed so easily.
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yes a third alicorn would be too powerful, plus it wouldn't fit the arc. As a final note, the Elements were on he rhorn, by breaking off her own horn, she seperated her connection to them, thus loosing the extra mana/magic they provided. As for the rest, I follow some of the other aspects of the horn in this case, and the way other fanfic writers have used it, that the horn, when removed, doesn't exactly grow back on its own, and is their only conduit for using magic.

Like we didn't see them shattered in Season 1, Ep2?

- Polecat
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Nova225 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2011
Shattered yes, their physical shell... then 1min later they were back, with Twilight even saying : ''You think you can destroy the Elements of Harmony just like that ? (...etc, ''you are wrong'', ''they are right here'', and you know what's next). ;)
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Eeeyup, but these new ponies DIDN'T know that. And Nightmare was on the other side of the portal, so she couldn't sneer at 'em.

- Polecat
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TillsterRulz Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2011
Yay, they escaped from the moon :D! With great ease... All this seems a little bit too suspicious... I suspect a huge plot event approaching... o.o
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:evillaugh:

- Polecat
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ParticalMass Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Looks like episode 20 will be the final showdown! Any plans for a season 2?
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Plans will be revealed when I am ready to reveal them. ;)

- Polecat
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Cloud101Jhi Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2011
Star on Galaxi's head? Oh right, THAT star. I'm guessing she would be the new bearer of the Element of Magic? :D
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You'll see... I won't give away plot points, especially not at this stage of the game. :)

- Polecat
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Nooful Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2011
Wait a second... plans working? No one dying? Everything seemingly going well?.....
what devious things are you planning.......
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Plans of plans of plans... :evillaugh:

- Polecat
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Chill-penguin Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2011
Another question, offtopic this time, was big macintosh a special, and if he was what was his power? i find the power choices you give characters fit their personality and i was wondering about him, since both applejack and apple bloom were special's.
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Big Mac wasn't a special, no. he lived his life as a farmer, even after he was forced to move from Ponyville. His sisters both were Specials however...

- Polecat
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Chill-penguin Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2011
another question then, what was the logic behind making apleblooms power invisibility? all the other specials seemed to have powers that were extensions of their special talent or personality to some point. I dont think applebloom ever wanted to fade out or avoid attention. I suppose she could be the exception to the rule.

Sorry for all the questions, this stuff is really interesting to me.
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Applebloom showed in the show a few times an interest in martial arts. Thus it became an extension of that, as it's not hard to go from "Martial arts" to 'Ninja" in my mind.

- Polecat
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Chill-penguin Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2011
ahh that makes sense.
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vladspellbinder Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011
Friendship - Trixie seems like the 'best' fit but Clockwork, Filigree and Galixia also work here. Nothing says it /has/ to be a Unicorn that gets this...
Generosity - Trixie fits here to, giving up her horn and all. I don't see who else could fit at the moment.
Loyalty - Galixia it seems. Though Clockwork was the first to say she would go and get Trixie back, and Flourish (have we been told her real name? Is that it?) was right behind her.
Honesty - Filigree says it like it is, could also be Shooting Star (Spectrum) too I guess, maybe, not really.
Kindness - Uhhh...Shooting Star? I'm not sure on this one...
Laughter - Flourish, and not much anyone else.

Good chapter like all the others. Things will be winding down now, and it's looking like the next chapter will be the ultimate fight if The Elements are getting back in on the action.
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Cyclone12 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2011
Personal guesses are:
Friendship: Galaxi- fits because once again we have a student of the princess, unicorn and introverted character before she joins the team and gets some friends. Lots of Twilight parallels.
Generosity: Trixie- I like it for as you mentioned giving up her horn and for the twist on her character in the show where she is shown to be quite selfish. Shows nice change and growth for the character.
Loyalty: Clockwork- Just refusing to leave behind Trixie pretty much sealed the deal. Just seems to be one of her main traits in the story
Honesty: Filigree- not a perfect fit imo but she fits the best of any of the 6.
Kindness: Spectrum- very apologetic character, evidently is the only person capable of calming Ultrapony
Laughter: Flourish- yep only one who fits
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
One note, it;s Rainbow Star that is Spectrum, no 'Shooting Star" character here. Also it's Galaxi, not Galixia. ;)

I will not say who gets what, but you have some interesting choices there. You'll have to wait until next chapter to see how close you are. ;)

- Polecat
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vladspellbinder Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2011
I didn't go back and look at the name, but thought I was off...I also left Pyre off the list, but she doesn't feel like a part of the group so much as 'filler' while Trixie was being held.
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vVKaptainVv Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2011
Hm... I'm gonna say Glaxi is Kindness. Just saying. Why? When her friends are in danger, she hulks out, Fluttershy style.
Filigree ... Hm... Honesty or loyalty. Honesty most likely.
Clockwork, now there's a tricky one. Loyalty.
Flourish: Laughter, hands down >3>
Rainbow Star, eh!? Um... Generosity? LAWL ... Well, maybe.
Tome : FRIENDSHIP ... Unless, generosity for the horn thing...

BUCK it, dunno lol.

Polecat, why you make me wait till next chapter!?
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vVKaptainVv Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2011
Unless... It doesn't need to be a unicorn that wields the 6th. WHAT A TWEEST!
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Chill-penguin Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011
since shes immortal, does that mean the horn will grow back?
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I won't step on a plot point, but is it not possible she just severed the source of that power?

- Polecat
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Chill-penguin Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011
its certainly possible, thats why i asked, it seems to me since earth ponies can manifest as specials, that any special abilities would come from the pony, not the horn. your the author though, so what ever you say goes.
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Don't worry, you'll see how things turn out... next chapter. ;)

- Polecat
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DarkonShadows Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011
Trixie lost her horn, but it's not a permanent loss unless you deem it so. Besides the magic is all in the body and not the horn, the horn is just a focal point for the energy to be released and thus a massive loss of energy will have occurred considering a lot of energy was flowing through it at the time of breakage.

The imps kind of remind me more of the 'Gummie Bear' Ogres in personality now. If anything Galaxi is proving herself to be quite the interesting last minute savior.
Poor Trixie will need a lot of therapy after this... following in order Galaxi, Clockwork, Flourish and finally Filligree because she actually enjoyed her dreams.

Last Thought: I hope season two (Starts in the next few days people) has some epic scenes like this episode of one of my favorite cartoons. [link] In fact I'm expecting some parallels to happen, sounds like I'm not going to be dissapointed from all the rumors buzzing around. I realized they saved Trixie but that’s only solving one of the problems, among the many others going on at once. The other is what Nightmare Moon is going to do now when she finds out Trixie is freed, how many imps she still has on Equestria and stuff like that.
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
In my mind, shattering off a horn like that would remove the "release" and focus point of magic in the body. Thus it's like cutting off a hand, and expecting to still be able to use said hand to pick up your mouse, or poke at the keyboard. ;)

Ogres? Whoah, I'd hoped they didn't seem THAT stupid.... But I suppose comparisons were inevitable when I gave personalities to two of them. ;)

Trixie will need therapy. Clockwork and Galaxi have their own issues to sort through, tho Clockwork never did truly say goodbye to her brother...

I'm looking forward to Season 2 myself, but I won't be able to see it until days after it has aired... hazards of working the air-date. Yup, they've solved ONE problem.... :evillaugh"

- Polecat
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DarkonShadows Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011
Well the names 'Gad' and 'Zooks' did come to mind and those are the most notably named ogres... they do have some semblance of competence and are vaguely of a higher level of intelligence in comparison to the rest of their kin.

Ramming headfirst into the wall while having an acrobat dodge out of the way swiftly and the running between the Destroyer imps legs were like beacons to make that reference.(Ogres have problems bending forward and stopping on a dime.) So yeah, it was inevitable considering how you wrote some of the scenes and given how Flourish bounces around like a rubbery pinball sometimes, aside from making FIM references you can make accidental stealth references as well.
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Corrupt-End Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011
Great story so far can't wait to see where it goes.
This was the first fanfic I ever read and is number 2 on my list.
Keep up the good work.
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm flatted to have drawn you in, and glad you're enjoying the ride. :)

- Polecat
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Corrupt-End Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011
I love how you reply to to comments. A lot of people don't and it's nice to know one of my favorite authors cares.
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I always try to respond to every comment, at least initially. Beyond that I don't feel compelled to. ;)

- Polecat
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SummerPwny Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011
every single time. i try to leave a comment that makes sense. Every single time. it ends like this! ****
something bothered me about trixie just being completely "OK" about being trapped for a few months under constant torture. and now im just "Meh, it fits the story"
By Celestias Beard. it got worse too. will they ever hit Rock bottom?
and i'll not be happy if you decide to give the elements to those ponies. well screw every element other then magic. Trixie better be getting that.
or im gonna throw a fit.
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You'll probably throw a fit. But I've seeded my ideas pretty thuroughly into things. As for Trixie, she's NOT okay... but she was desperately trying to hold out too. And yes, it can ALWAYS get worse....

- Polecat
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SummerPwny Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011
just re-read my comment, it made even less sense then i had hoped. anyhow!

It hit me while i was out for a smoke, this story will end someday. no new chapters. sadface.
Most of the time is alone, waiting for the buss or smoking or just being by myself, my mind wanders to this universe you've built up. the idea of "specials" keeps my imagination busy, i make up small stories of Twilight doing amazing magic things, heck i even spent a few days unable to get a character you only mentioned once out of my head (Jasmine Bloom).

Point being, without realizing it, this story grew on me more then i thought, and i'll be sad when the last chapter gets released.
Just wanted you to know how much i love this story. <3
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow, that really means a lot. Especially, as I recall, you were so adamantly opposed to it in the early chapters. I'm grateful you gave me the opportunity to suck you in, and that you're enjoying your stay.

Yes, every good thing MUST come to an end. The question will be, what end will it be?

- Polecat
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leviadragon99 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011
Ohhh... and Tome loses not only the godhood, but her own horn and the magic that comes with it...
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Sacrificed her horn, in a way, since she did it herself.

- Polecat
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leviadragon99 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2011
True, but even so... ouch man...
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very ouch.

- Polecat
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Wistan Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Oh man, yay :D Can't wait for the next installment!
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Glad you enjoyed it. :)

- Polecat
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WingZero032 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011
ok, now my suspicions are confiremd, Flurish is definetly Pinkie Pie's daughter, and was capable(in a twisted ironic sense) to activate the elements of harmony even when they were destroyed, AWESOME JOB, I'm waiting for the next chapter
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TCPolecat7 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Heh. A lot of suspicions, but no. She's not Pinkie's daughter... even if they have some similarities. And remember, it was Galaxi who activated them, not Flourish....

- Polecat
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WingZero032 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011
oh, sorry about the missunderstanding then, but I look forward to the next chapter
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kotmorda Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011
*Blink*
What... did you just...
OH HELL YES. no "It got worse" moment in this chapter.

I take Pyre is not dead yet?
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